Edit/Rewrite Final Draft
Keep in mind: Your “initial draft” and final draft are almost identical, which does not provide me with evidence that you brought the final draft up from an outline slowly. While that was not a requirement, I wanted to see students’ progress – not just two final drafts.
I have read a few grammatical mistakes in the first couple of pages – make sure to use a spelling and grammar checker and proofread your final draft on paper, where you will find it to easier to spot mistakes than the computer screen.
You showed that you gave real thought to this topic and came up with some original ideas, which extended beyond the generic essay that would have represented the minimal effort. There were some grammatical mistakes, misused words, and a few sentences that could be better formed.
Essay Prompt:
Western ethics has historically prioritized male philosophers, often marginalizing the contributions of women and other underrepresented groups. Discuss whether corporate business
ethics today would be different if women’s philosophical contributions had been more fully integrated into ethical discourse. Construct a well-supported argument for your position using historical examples and ethical theories