I talk about how me and my grandpa have always had a special bond in which we would both obsess over music. We would play together at family gatherings, whenever the Happy Birthday song came up etc. But when he was diagnosed with Parkinson’s disease, everything sort of fell apart and we weren’t able to perform as a duo anymore. To set this scene up, I use a metaphor of an earthquake and relate that to Parkinson’s disease and how my grandpa sufferes from internal earthquakes. Another idea I had in mind was to use a piece written by Chopin called the Butterfly Etude and how it captures the essence of life with its many uses of legatos, staccatos, legatos, repeat. I relate to that of life and how life is always full of these staccato moments, or jumps and how my grandpa getting hit with this disease was a legato-staccato moment for me.
As of right now, I have solid ideas for what you can call the “sob story” part of my essay, but am unsure as to how I can write with good flow, the “comeback” part, where I write about ‘what’ I did and what I learned from the experience (how it shaped me to who I am today).
I have attached a file with drafted paragraphs, and lots of scattered ideas. For now, nothing is really connected. I hope that you can use some of my ideas but also create your own in terms of how you can connect everything and word the ‘comeback’ part without making it sound corny or cliche.